In his prompt today, David at
ben Alexander, The Skeptic’s Kaddish
invited us to try our hand
at a poetry form
that is new to me:
Sijo
A Korean verse form related to haiku and tanka and comprised of three lines of 14-16 syllables each, for a total of 44-46 syllables. Each line contains a pause near the middle, similar to a caesura, though the break need not be metrical. The first half of the line contains six to nine syllables; the second half should contain no fewer than five. Originally intended as songs, sijo can treat romantic, metaphysical, or spiritual themes. Whatever the subject, the first line introduces an idea or story, the second supplies a “turn,” and the third provides closure. Modern sijo are sometimes printed in six lines.
David did a fantastic job with the form. Click on his name & blog title above to read his contribution.
I told him I was not sure I was even going to try… it sounds too complicated! But… with the following meme as a prompt, here goes:
Your mind will always believe, if you are ever truthful;
But when you are deceitful, you feed it sorrow, deep grief.
Feed your mind sincere love and truth, and it will be returned to you.
Bob & I send our love and deep peace
to you and your loved ones today.
Thanks for visiting JanBeek.
Will you try your hand at Sijo?
Comments on: "Love Returned" (7)
I don’t know about the form, yet I commend your sentiment, Jan
Thank you, {{{Derrick}}} ❤️ Have a great day!
Actually, it wasn’t my prompt, Jan ~ it was Eugi’s ~ I was just responding to it!
thanks for sharing your poem with me ~ I’ve responded to it and published it at The Skeptic’s Kaddish.
Sincerely,
David
Ah, thanks for the clarification & post, David.
Wow, Jan! I think you did an amazing job on this. First, I read it for content. I agree with Derrick and commend your sentiment. Then, I couldn’t resist counting your syllables so see if you followed the criteria. If my count is correct, you nailed that as well.
Thank you!! I really appreciate your visit and taking time to count and affirm. That’s cool!!
Lovely, indeed!